Muriku of Blue Queieth

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Muriku

Name: Muriku
Pronunciation: Moo-rick-ew
Age: 29
Season Born In: Winter
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Heterosexual

Appearance:
Muriku is a tall and slender lady. She's swift and walks with a brisk, cool and confident step, with a sassy hip sway. Her eyes are a stunning blue, dazzling to some, intimidating to others. Her lips are fine and express as much emotion as her eyes. When pressed firmly together, she's in a bad mood and its best to leave her be. She doesn't smile a lot, more smirking but if you can warm up to her she has a lovely smile. Her hair is a golden sunshine color, usually braided at one side.
Her style is simple, soft fabric that is loose but graceful. Blue is her color, and only her shirt holds a color. Her pants and boots would be either brown or black...
Personality:
Muriku had never been a loving person.
After losing Ion, things are harder for the woman to handle.

Her face is a mask of many lies, she smiles in her hurt, remains serious in her anger. Mostly Muriku, however, is angry. She lost the one person whom she loved and whom showered her in love. She is broken and insecure.

There is noone for Muriku to turn too, nowhere for her to hide. For Kunio's sake she's pretending everything is alright. She lives for her daughter and for her arrogent dragon. Kunio is the moon and stars to Muriku. Her lovely child would be the woman's dearest treasure. Kunoi is Muriku's comfort. The daughter can be at time smothered by her mother, with little time for herself.
This at times has damaged the mother-daughter relationship or stressed their love.

This woman's insecurities prevented her from embracing help or aiding the healing of her losses. She really has worsened the wounds with her denial and hurt.
She uses hate and anger to hide her shattered heart, many times blowing up in a person's face for nothing. She needs friends, but she refuses to let people in. People try to help, but she shys away... Muriku cannot stand seeing how happy and calm life is, while she's dieing inside. How can the world move on after such death?


Family:
M'ur / Father / Bluerider
Rik / Mother / Greenrider
Kunoi / Daughter / 13 turns / Candidate
Location: Trelis
Rank: Wingrider
Wing/Pack:

History:
Muriku's childhood was not the happiest. Her mother's green rose and was caught her father's blue. Simple enough right? It was a one night fling, but resulted in her mother's pregnancy.
Her mother was enraged but didn't have the heart to between. She took no responsibility for this child, instead dumping little Muriku upon her father at her first chance.

Her father was trapped by the babe, angry and unhappy with how things turned out. He showered his hate on Muriku every chance he had, until one day (Muriku's 7th birthday to be exact) he up and left her in the care of the weyr. Neither parent have been seen since.

After such abuse then abandonment, Muriku was not a pleasent child. She had fits and would throw things. When tried to be soothed, she'd spit at your face, kick at your shins, but most of all she screamed 'I hate you!' This phrase no doubt learned from her father.

But one person ignored this.
His name was Ion.

He was a handsome boy of 8. Muriku's fits did not scare him. During each episode he just sat in her doorway, ducking to avoid thrown things or being hit.
Time passed and one day the 'I hate you's turned into a whispered, and scared 'I love you.'

They became close, something more than siblings. More than friends. By the age of 15 Muriku and Ion were engaged.
Neither had ever hoped to love someone so much, and the two were happy.
It was only a season before Muriku was with child. Her child. Ion's child. Their child...

Muriku gave birth to a healthy little girl, a daughter whom everyone just adored. Ion wasn't there for the birth.
Ion wasn't home that night.
Or the next day.
And by the next nightfall, Muriku dreaded the worst.

News came, and it still haunts Muriku. Ion had been injured, though it is unclear how. He was found dead on the 3rd day of his absense.

In a room draped in blue
I am thinking of you
I am tired and I can't sleep
and for you I will weep
in a flash you are gone
yet around me life is calm
I cannot understand
is this part of the plan?

They can't take your place
And I have dreams about us
but I always wake up
And I can ask all i please
I can beg down on my knees
For a reason
For a sign but these answers i won't find.

oh can you hear me
can't you tell me
why.... why.... why....
I'll go on with out you
And what's left for me to do
but to stay here where i am
And my world of pretend
Yeah i won't know until i die
If my faith was alive
Untill then you'll hear it in my cry
I didn't want to say goodbye to you...
I didn't want to say goodbye to you....
I didn't want to say goodbye to you......

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Kunoi grew and was a blessing in Muriku's life, however her daughter couldn't replace her lost Ion. For the following 9 turns after Ion's death, Muriku spent her time secluded and caring for her daughter. She was scared and too hurt and alone to want help. Kunoi suffered a little during this time, possiblely affecting her child's social development and her ability to interact with others. It took her 9 turns to recover enough to finally try to reach her dream - dragonriding.

The turns passed, and the most recent 4 turns brought another blessing. (or curse depending on who you ask)

Muriku was granted canidancy, and Impressed her first time standing.
Her 9 year old Kunoi was eagerly watching, while Muriku was focused on the eggs.
Many eggs hatched, none seemed drawn to Muriku. But then there was a blue.
Mine, your eyes shall search no more. I do not need to explain anymore. Come to your handsome Queieth. [/color]

To others, the blue would be offensive and rude. But Muriku loved him. He reminded her of Ion, his blue eyes and his handsome and muscular figure...

Queieth

Name: Queieth
Pronunciation:
Age: 4 turns
Rank: Blue
Size: 31 feet
Color Codes:
223a55
cedbeb
7395bd
Appearance:
Queieth is a muscular blue. He prides himself to that fact, flaunting his strength and hide.

His colorings fade from dark blue, to silver-blue, to a middling blue, fading over his hide. His muzzle is darker, same as his feet and wing tips.

His claws are long, and he keeps them sharp. He has a quirk of grinding his nails against a rock to achieve pointiness.
He takes very serious care of his appearance, making Muriku oil him, and hr has her keep him in tip-top shape.
Occasionally you might catch him peeking at his reflection in a bit of water, but he's very secretive.

Personality:
Queieth is an interesting blue. He is arrogent, believing he's the absolute best. He gets mad when others to not agree with his logic'.

All things cone naturally to him, or so he boast. Why should he work hard to prove himself when he is clearly great? He's not lazy, more... he prefers doing only the things he feels like - and even then he's a bit unmotivated and sloppy in his work.

If Queieth enjoys anyone's company that would the presence of a lady. Be it amethyst, green, white or gold, Queieth loves them all. He is a noble and egotistical Prince Charmingest so he flaunts and flexes to show off. If you ask Muriku, the only reason her blue works hard is to impress a female.

Mind-Voice (If applicable):
The fools have no idea how excellent we are! I have no need or reason to prove myself, because I am great.
-Deep and almost regal, but his comments are too selfish for a King.
-Prideful and un-realistic explanations of his talents and value.
-Booming and grinding when angry, rough with growls and roars.
-Flirty with the ladies.

Soldier

Name: Soldier
Pronunciation: As it looks
Age: 1turn
Type: firelizard
Rank: Garnet
Size: 29 inches
Color Codes:
Main body - 9b111e
Splotches and patches - 860111
Tribal/warriorish specks and stripes - 000000

Appearance/Personality:
Soldier is a surprisingly calm Garnet. He demands to be in control and be treated as a King. Those who do not pay respects are punished by tooth and claw. He sometimes bites Muriku, but after being snapped at by Queieth, he has withdrawn abit. That doesn't mean he won't bite a stranger or even a friend, or that he's nice to other firelizards...

Soldier is a long bodied male with a long neck and tail. He's all length and muscle. This Garnet is a swift flyer, and he is also a revengeful hunter. If he is looking for payback, he'll get you at your least expecting moment.

[Wish]

Okay, looking great and I'm loving how you're growing and delving into more complex characters!

Now, that said I'd like you to re-order some of your things so that instead of being spread out, the two appearance for she and her blue are one paragraph each. That's all it needs to be minimum and you cover things fine, it's just going to look a lot more concise and become easier to read if you put it as one thing.

Moving on, the personalities for both should be expanded on just a tad bit more. You have great starts of some parts, and full ideas in others. Really think about how this type of person would act. You mentioned she was very closed off and didn't let anyone in except for her daughter, but what else does that mean? She's quick to anger as well, so does she get easily frustrated with tasks? How would that affect her in wing practices? Furthermore, try to think of other aspects of her personality. It'll make her more interesting as well as help you to grow as a writer while understanding every angle that your character provides.

Next, in the history when she impresses you refer to Kunoi as Ion. That's the only thing I see wrong there.

Other than that it's a great bio and keep working!